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People think that goverments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve envinronmental problems. Give your opinion

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It is certainly true that one solution to address environmental issues would be for the governments to raise the prices of petrol
.
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.
Although
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 consider that
this
 might be an effective measure,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that other measures have even more profound impacts. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why increasing the fuel prices is beneficial in addressing some of the environmental problems
.
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Firstly
, in terms of private cars, when the national authorities raise the taxes on petrol, motorists will have to limit the time and length of their journey.
Therefore
, governments will have more money to reinforce and update the public
transport
 provision, as people still need to go the office, school or other medical health services like hospital,
for example
.
Secondly
, from the perspective of the freight services, more goods are transported by rail
instead
 of truck.
Thus
, Both these measures will cut down on emissions and reduce the greenhouse effects.
On the other hand
, while
this
 rise in fuel prices might be a stopgap measure, governments can adopt other policies which may be more effective in the long term.
For instance
, the local authorities in London have introduced a congestion charge on all vehicles visiting the city central.
As a result
, they have subsidized their money on some health awareness campaigns and spending on the
transport
 infrastructure. In turn, there is a general decline in exhaust fumes from vehicles around the city centre and the air quality in the city has improved by
this
 action. Another policy could be to establish some free bus and train routes, as the increased use of public
transport
 will alleviate pollution from private cars and help in the effort to combat global warming. In conclusion, a sharp rise in petrol prices can be a useful environmentally friendly
transport
 measure,
although
 in the long term other steps will be more valuable
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • increase the cost of fuel
  • reduce greenhouse gas emissions
  • air pollution
  • public transportation
  • carpool
  • fuel-efficient vehicles
  • sustainable transportation infrastructure
  • affordability of transportation
  • low incomes
  • governments should strike a balance
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