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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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While many people believe that young people using computers on a regular basis have a bad impact on them, others believe that the advantages of computers overshadow the disadvantages. In my perspective, computers have both positive and negative impacts on children depending upon the usage and in the essay, I will discuss my view with some examples. At the outset, excessive use of computers or laptops can have damaging impacts
such
 as, weak
eye sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
 and poor academic scores. Teenagers who use computers to play online games tend to damage their
eye-sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
.
As a result
, they have to wear spectacles at a very early age.
Additionally
, they are killing their study time while playing computerized games which will eventually affect their academic grades. In 2019, a survey was conducted by Seattle Children Eye Hospital on a considerable number of teenagers and it was found that 85 percent of them cannot see properly without power glasses.
However
, if computers are used appropriately, they can
also
 prove to be very useful academically. Teachers cannot be available at all the time to clear children's doubts, but, they can certainly google to clarify their
doubt
Suggestion
doubts
 and learn more about the topic. Due to the Covid-19 global pandemic,
although
 the academic loss incurred by the students is insurmountable, many schools came up with the idea to distribute desktops and laptops among several students so that they can continue with their learning. In conclusion, computers have both pros and cons depending upon how it is being used. When used extensively, it can impact the studies, but if used in a timely manner, it can certainly turn out to be a boon to the students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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