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Some people suggest that it is better for children to be brought up by the whole family including uncles, aunts and grandparents, rather than just the parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples.

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The rising trend of modern lifestyle and its effects on children’s behaviour, has led to the question whether it is helpful for children to live in a joint family or not? In my opinion, attention to the advantages of
this
 lifestyle, without counting their disadvantages is simplistic. So, I do believe that raising children in a joint family is like a double-edge sword, which could have a lot harms and benefits for children simultaneously. A number of arguments surrounded my opinion. On the one hand, a group of psychologists believes that joint families could have a lot of advantages for both children and their parents.
Firstly
, children have the opportunity to connect to their roots and know their family tree. It would able them to know themselves more easily in the word.
Secondly
, they can learn how to behave with other genders, how respect for them, and how express their feelings and opinions for their grandparents, aunts, uncles, etc.
thirdly
Suggestion
Thirdly
, the risk of spending their leisure time on unhealthy entertainments is decreased considerably, and they get more opportunity to have healthy entertainments,
such
 as listen to their grandparent’s stories, play with their cousins. It is
also
 worth recalling that, their parents could focus on their job, without being concerned about their children.
On the other hand
, if
this
 interaction between children’s parents and their grandparents do not manage well, it would cause some harmful effects on children.
For example
, if family members could not understand well each other, the rate of conflicts is increased and the risk of children’s mental problems is increased
consequently
. To give another example, in joint families, children do not have enough time to spend with their self, so, their privacy is complacent. In conclusion, raising children in a joint family has a lot of harms and benefits simultaneously,
thus
, highlighting
this
 lifestyle’s principles and manage well the interaction between the family members, could decrease the disadvantages and increase advantages for children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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