Some people think that women should not be allowed to work in the police force. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that in

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day and age, opinion is divided over whether

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ought to be disenfranchised. In

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essay, I will look at both sides of

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debate

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offer my own point of view. Turning first of all to the arguments in favour of

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idea, it goes without saying that

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are more likely than men to experience life events

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as pregnancy, which naturally leads to more periods of leave.In

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instance,

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are more likely than men to have a valid absence or have longer periods of leave

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the nature of their being pregnant or taking parental or carer’s leave.

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could lead to stress being created in the workplace. As far as the other side of

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debate is concerned, it is generally acknowledged that some cases are difficult for male

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officers to handle,

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as sex crimes. It may

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be worth noting that forbidding

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from being

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officers would take away

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's freedom of choice in the profession, which can amount to sexism and human rights. By way of conclusion, from the ideas and examples above, it can be seen that there are valid arguments on both sides of

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debate.

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, I am of the opinion that in the grand scheme of things, the disadvantages of not allowing

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to be

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officers outweigh the merits.

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is especially true in today's society, where human rights violations and sexism are being addressed even more than before.

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Consider exploring additional perspectives to enrich the discussion.

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You have structured your essay well, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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You successfully discussed arguments for both sides before presenting your own viewpoint, which enhances the completeness of your response.

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Your conclusion effectively summarizes the arguments and clearly states your stance.

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

254 words

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Some people think that women should not be allowed to work in the police force. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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