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Topic: some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. Question: To what extent do you agree with this view?

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It is thought by some individuals that taxpayers’
money
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 should not be spent on the arts as they think that there are more important
government
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 responsibilities that should be financed.
Although
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 I believe that the
government
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 should spend
greater amount
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a greater amount
greater amounts
 of
money
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 on public services, I do not support the view that spending
money
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 on the arts is a waste. I think higher proportion of the state budget should be invested in public services.
Government
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 expenditure on
such
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 important spheres as improving education, building roads, hospitals and schools and helping to eradicate poverty is essential needs of any country. Without
proper education system
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a proper education system
the proper education system
, illiteracy would be a major problem, while people living in countries without high standard roads, hospitals and schools would suffer a lot. Helping the poor is
also
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 one of the main priorities of any
government
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. All of these responsibilities require a plethora of investment by the
government
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.
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, it does not mean that
money
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 spent on the arts is a waste. Architecture, painting and sculptures are the forms of art and spending
money
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 on them attracts local and foreign visitors. Tourists flocking to these places could help develop
economies
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the economies
 of those counties by creating jobs for local communities and bringing foreign currency. To sum up, while I think that the governments should prioritize public services when it comes to budget allocation for different
government
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 responsibilities, I still do not share the opinion that spending
money
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 on the arts should be discouraged.
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