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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.

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Nowadays, parents spoil their children by buying them whatever they ask them. Many parents are incapable of raising their children in a disciplinary manner. It is often argued that giving punishment to children will bring in the moral values and ethical behaviours. I completely disagree with
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 statement. In my opinion, I believe that providing a corporal penalty to
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, the majority of the children are incredibly in
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obeying the rules
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They are not afraid of their parents as well as their teachers. They spend most of their time on gadgets, and they have become spoilt children. Parents think that smacking their children when they commit mistakes will create a sense of fear, and they will hesitate to repeat the same error.
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 will create a negative impact on the parents, and in the long run, a child will develop a sense of hatred towards their parents and refuse to comply with them.
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, some parents ethically raise their children by being strict towards them without breaking their bondage of their love towards their children. Parents are harsh with their children; they correct them by giving punishment, and
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 has developed a positive behaviour. There are umpteen examples in schools where the students who have reached significant positions in their lives have praised their teachers as well as their parents for being strict and give them punishments to put them on the right track. In my opinion, children are our future. They should be corrected with kind words
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 of harsh punishments for their mistakes, which in turn will develop a sense of love and well being for their parents and teachers.
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