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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible, while others argue that it has had a very negative impact. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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Many think that the invention of
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 has been extremely helpful by making international
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 more handy, while others oppose to
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 view and believe that it has had a very adverse effect.
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 has been very advantageous by letting people enjoy different culture and places compared with very minor negative effect as other believes is not true or valid. International
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 is more accessible than ever before because of the creation of
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air
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. People can consider flying in different location for work or leisure which was not possible before for the high
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 fare. Any person with mid-range income can think of a holiday now because of
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. People can experience different cultures and visit places in distant locations without worrying about emptying their pockets.
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, my brother travelled whole Europe by Ryan
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, the cheapest airline within the same
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 what my father spent about a few years back to
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 by bus in Europe. More and more flights operate every day than it ever used to be for the blessing of economical
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 which has a slight negative impact on the environment as
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 often dump fuel in the
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 before landing to reduce the total weight for a safe landing.
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, there is a strict aviation rule to maintain a safe gap while dumping fuel to make sure there is zero to minimal effect on the environment. To conclude, International
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 is more reachable to people to
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 internationally and experience different culture because of the invention of
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 and the negative impact can be easily taken care of by following the rules.
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