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The internet has caused people to be isolated from their rea lives. Do you agree or disagree?

#internet #people #rea #lives
It is generally believed by a host of people that the
internet
 can cause people to become less socialized and be more individualistic. To some extent, personally, I agree with
this
 statement. In the following paragraphs, I will put forth my argument to support my point of view. On the one hand, when it comes to
interne
t, there
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the internet
 are lots of valuable merits for users which cannot be eliminated.
Firstly
, the
internet
 contains an endless supply of knowledge and informa
tions that a
a message received and understood
information
llows to learn about almost about any topic or questions which we may have. To give an example, students can utilize a search engine like Google, to ask virtually any question and find web page with an answer and information about that question. There are
also
 millions of videos on site like YouTube
which explai
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YouTube, which
ns various topics, and even online courses to help teach young g
eneration about
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the young generation
many different subjects.
Secondly
, an
internet
 connection provides many people with the ability to work from home or have a virtual offices
. In th
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office
e modern era, the number of businesses which their employe
es to work home and us
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employees home to work
ing their both computers and
internet
 connection is growing day by day.
Hence
, it can help save people’s money and time by eliminating the daily commute. If somebody is a business that needs employees, many services online can give access to people looking for a job around the world. In conclusion,
although
, the online services may pose seclusion of people, it extremely depends on how we use it. If society use
int
ern
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uses
e
t in a w
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the internet
ise approach, it will be the indispensable part of our life.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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