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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a wast of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extend do you agree with this statement.

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Spending our free time is the most important one in our life successful people will spend in a good way.
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, many people believe that investing in music and theatre are a waste of money. I agree with
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 statement to a large extend for some reason. My position is argued
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 with the explanation. Out of all the reasons, the foremost one is the library. With that investment if we build a huge library that will be grateful for education everyone will gain some knowledge, through that we can avoid unemployment. To add to
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 in our nation, there are many poor people are living not having enough money to buy books itself for them it will be a great opportunity to learn with free of cost.
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, the government can build many parks where people will get physically fit and we can avoid many health problems due to obesity.
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Moreover kids
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Moreover, kids
 will have some space to play outdoor games
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 of playing inside the house with mobile phones.
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, if anybody visits park regularly, we can have more neighbourhood friends.
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, I would not overlook the other side too.
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 with, music and theatre are the best entertainment for relax and stress free.
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Also we
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Also, we
 can have some nice time to spend with family, but it's quite expensive not affordable for everybody.
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, to conclude the discussion, it can
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 be said
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 said that
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 there are few benefits of music and theatre but not essential for life. I believe having a library and park will give physical and mental strength which mandatory for mankind.
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