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Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

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At present, the technology is changing in all countries of the world. Certain people say that modern innovations have lots of problems than benefits.
However
, I disagree with the given hook, as I think that it has many advantages, which is very useful for us. I would like to explain the problems and benefits in the upcoming paragraphs. Since the technology is making new features for the growth of people, they tend to use more and more during their life. It has created many factors.
Such
 as computer, smart phone and many more.
For example
, if a person has no time meet other people, he or she can use these features stay connected with each other. It saves the time of the individuals. And they can able to invest
on
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in
 other activities.
Moreover
, there are many places, where women do their tasks with machines. Due to
this
, they can do part time jobs, which can be very beneficial. Despite the merits of the machinery, it creates many quandaries.
Firstly
, people become lazy in their work.
For instance
, if a man uses mobile in not
limit
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the limit
. There are many chances of addicted mobile. He or she
losses
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
loses
 their light of eyes. They are not able to do things with properly and always late for their task. The major problem is that, they become obese. To conclude, even though modern innovations have many problems, but it has lots of advantages.
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