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in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studied

#countries #people #work #travel #year #school #university
Taking
one
year
gap
 between high school &
university
 studies is
become
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becoming
 very popular in some countries. Those who think that it is an opportunity for their future plan to work in somewhere and travel extensively.
Actually in
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Actually, in
 the latest training where I participated, I met with several people from Denmark and Norway who were over 24 and are working
in
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with
 non-profit organizations. By assembling all of the facts I will try to examine what are the advantages and shortages of taking
one
year
gap
.
First
 of all, of course after high school, working and travelling
experience
 can be
valuable opportunity
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a valuable opportunity
valuable opportunities
 for personal development and career advancement. By travelling, prospective students are able to acknowledge different culture, values and tradition.
Moreover
, while travelling students can develop their
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
 and confidence and
thus
 these two main qualities can help them to overcome crisis which can happen in their life. Working
experience
 is very crucial factor, and my
experience
 shows that companies in some
cases look
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cases, look
 for experienced employees more than someone qualified or graduated from
university
 and have no prior experiences.
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Add
Adding
 to it,
experience
 in
work place
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the workplace
workplace
 is kind of practises and whatever gained from practises may match with syllabus of some subject which will they have,
thus
 in
this
 case students’ knowledge on those subjects will be advanced. Taking a
gap
year
 has several disadvantages. Talking about it, after working and travelling students can be neglect to their
university
, in some cases, they may not take any
university
 studies at all. Even in the case of getting a course at
university
, the atmosphere of
class
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the class, such
the class such
a class such
such
 as attendance and discipline can seem hard to students. So students feel
hardships
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the hardships
 to adapt and overcome. In conclusion, I can easily say that taking a
gap
year
 has some advantages and drawbacks, and it is hard to say
one
 of two exceeds another
one
 and
one
 of famous scholar said: before I spent time and now time is spending me so I consider that it is a personal choice whether to take or not.
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