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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, pupils are acquiring a knowledge in the single-sex schools which were selected by their parents, and it is claimed that it will h
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 notion. In the following paragraphs I shall put forth my argument to support my point of view.
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, due to less communication with the opposite gender anyone will sense a discomfort and
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 one’s professional life affected badly.
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, pupils, who went to only single-gender schools grew up shy and weak.
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, personality who wants to get a job should pass a conversation in which checks ability to capable of performing under cruel circumstances.
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 is a graduate of the single-sex school, the individual does not have a challenging work. Whereas people who have attended mixed-gender institute have proven to perform excellently under any critical situation.
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, co-educational institutions have a badly discipline issue, which interfere of their studies with allowing various contradictions.
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, separated gender schools can avoid from these problems and
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, everyone would completely focus on their lessons. To put it simply, it is proved that almost all of the graduates who gain an education in single-sex high schools have more ability to concentrate comparing with conventional institutes.
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 type of schools does not waste special time and improves attention skills. To sum up, I believe that young generations who were not attending co-ed schools are not able to successfully and develop professionally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • social interaction
  • real-world preparation
  • gender stereotypes
  • academic performance
  • healthy competition
  • personal and professional settings
  • reinforce
  • collaborate
  • representative environment
  • promote gender equality
  • break down stereotypes
  • social pressures
  • academic concentration
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