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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is predictable that in the near future, individuals avoid buying
paper
 materials and
instead
, read them online and for free. I strongly agree with
this
 approach and I believe it will happen soon.
To begin
 with, in contemporary times, everyone has a smart device
such
 as a mobile phone or tablet.
Therefore
, they can access to varied range of
books
, newspapers and magazines in the blink of an eye. You don’t have to worry about forgetting your
books
 any more or bother yourself to carry them all the time because now you are able to sort and organize them in files on your laptop or phone. There are some specific apps like Ebook that help you find your favourite text to read.
For example
, I use
this
 app for downloading the latest published
books
 and in
this
 way not only my time will be saved but
also
 I don’t have to carry heavy
books
 around. The second major reason is money. Most of the online
books
 and newspapers are free or extremely cheap.
On the other hand
, the price of
paper
 materials has been increasing dramatically in the
last
 few years.
Therefore
, buying
books
, especially the newest ones is not affordable for plenty of people like university students who need a number of different sources every month.
However
, some individuals may argue that
paper
books
 are more convenient to read.
Moreover
, using electronic devices can lead to eyesight issues in the long term.
Nevertheless
, I think all of these problems can be managed if you use the technology in the correct way. In conclusion,
although
 reading
paper
books
 and newspapers feels so natural and doesn’t bring us any health problems, sometimes it is more comfortable to use smart devices for reading which is cost-effective and accessible for anyone no matter where they are.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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