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International travel has many advantages to both travellers and the country that they visited. Do Advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Both host countries and foreign visitors have been benefited
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. While it has significant advantages,
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 has its negative sides, which need to be considered. International
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 allows both visitors and the hosts to view the world widely and learn about different cultures. By seeing another way of life, each group is able to get true knowledge of what they have read in books and experience it in real life. A typical example of
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 is when these groups find friendliness to be intrusive due to mismatched cultural expectations. Fortunately, they learn
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 cultural feature and
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 helps them to have tolerance towards other similar nations and not to be rude when responding. In Turkey, the Turks could be overly friendly, making visitors uncomfortable, while the hosts may feel disrespected. Clearly, exposure to foreign ways could open understanding towards differences.
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, travelling overseas is usually pricey pleasure for both tourists and host governments.
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 is limited mostly to their budget: the less money they have, the less attractions they might get around in visiting a country. For the country, it is important to maintain and upgrade its cultural and natural attractions in order to be more competitive with other
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 locations. Generally speaking, the focus on enhancing tourism may cause the neglect of other branches of government, like education or public health. It is clear that tourism could be costly for both sides. In my opinion, travelling is a tool which empowers people to understand other nations. The cost of tolerance learned is invaluable compared to any money incurred.
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