Some people thinks that governments should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree.

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Government
tax
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is a way of fund raising for their operations and fund raising out unhealthy
food
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is a way of discouraging people to go for unhealthy
food
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. When, people think on overspending on
food
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they will start
avoid
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to avoid
avoiding
it.
Still it
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Still, it
has certain issues like loss of
job
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for many, in
this
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percent lifestyle many
depends
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depend
on the income out of
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food industry
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the food industry
. Due to change in lifestyle
Firstly
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, junk foods
has become
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have become
part of the
mordern
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
lifestyle. Which invited many diseases and brought people's health into disaster, not only for
this
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generation and to the future generations as well.
Secondly
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, if the government
impose
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imposes
more
tax
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on these junk
food
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this
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will lead to reduce the consumption of these kind of
food
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.
This
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kind of decline in consumption will reflect in production, intern
this
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will implicate in
job
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loss for many. In
this
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case
government
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the government
should make the necessary alternative
job
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opportunity for people before they implement high
tax
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rates.
Thirdly
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, the waste of natural
resouces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
involved in
production
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the production
of
these
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these foods
food
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.
This
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may not implicate our life in the near future still it will be in
de
definite article
the
facto.
For example
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,
cauvery
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Cauvery
delta is affected due to the cool drink factor located in
this
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area.
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, the increase in
tax
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will help the
goverent
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to raise fund for their operational expenses and for new
productive
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product
production
plans for
goodness
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the goodness
of the people. Which is a very good for
nation's development
Suggestion
the nation's development
a nation's development
. In my view, the junk
food
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will spoil the health of the people and land. At the same time government should plan for necessary alternative ways to increase the
job
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opportunity for the people involved in
this
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industry
then
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increase the
tax
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to control the unhealthy
food
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habits of the people.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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