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The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three pie charts illustrate how many
articles
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 from academic journals are read weekly by
PhD
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students
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 and junior lecturers compared to other
students
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 at an Australian university.
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, the overwhelming majority of those studying
doctorates
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for doctorates
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 read at least twelve
articles
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 per week in comparison with the average student. The figures were 80 per
cent
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 and twelve per
cent
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 respectively.
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, only five per
cent
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 of
PhD
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 level
students
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 read between one and five
articles
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,
whereas
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 the average for all
students
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 in
this
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 category is a hefty 67 per
cent
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. Meanwhile, for junior
lecturers
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,lecturers
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 the pattern appears to be slightly different. Most read six or more
articles
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 per week (99 per
cent
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), but out of
this
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 total 24 per
cent
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 read twelve or more, which is almost a
third
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 of the corresponding figure for
PhD
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 level
students
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.
It is clear that
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 those
students
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 who are researching for a
PhD
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 read more
articles
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 than either junior lecturers or other
students
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words articles, phd, students, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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