Throughout the history, people dream to live in a perfect society while they haven’t agrees how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make a perfect society? What do people do to achieve an ideal society

SInce
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earlier
time
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, humans
expect
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to enjoy a good neighbourhood
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expectations from an intact society
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still not clear.
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essay discusses
love
as an important element
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in making
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a healthy environment and periodic social
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as,
perfect
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the perfect
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way to get
people
along. Just like
people
living in a house are a family,
similarly
people
living around us should
also
be considered as a family. The only bond that holds together as a family is
love
,
hence
in order to accept neighbours there should be
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of
love
and compassion amongst each other.
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, when I am out of
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the station
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due to
some work , it's the feeling of
love
and compassion that
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my neighbour
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take
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care of my pet . Social gathering is an old ritual and a tried and tested approach
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living together. There are always some traditions in each society which everyone should follow like having dinner parties once a month, gatherings
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festivals etc.
This
helps
people
interact with each other and
hence
, develop a feeling of compassion for each other. A recent study has shown that societies which started having events every few days
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have observed a reduction in complaints
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up to
40%.
To conclude
, everyone wants to live in
healthy
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the healthy
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and fulfilling environment and
people
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the people
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living around you
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an important role in that. Though there is no definition of a perfect society,
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people
can try to make it one by respecting and caring for each other and it can be easily achieved by having frequent meetings to mix up with each other.
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