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Fashion is difficult to follow, and some people argue that we should not follow it. They think that we should dress what we like and feel comfortable. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is little room for doubt that customs play a pivotal part in human life. There is a controversy as to whether people solely wear comfortable clothes compared to a fashionable one.
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 essay will provide solid evidence to support
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 point of view.
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 of all, it should be noted that outfit is a way of representing characteristics.
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this
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 notion is based on the undeniable fact that internal factors
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 as psychology will decide the way people behave and dress up.
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 example, an extrovert person will be more open to bright
color whereas
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colour, whereas
colour whereas
colours whereas
 the introvert one feels comfortable with reserved and dark customs.
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, when feeling comfortable within themselves, they will express outside comfort.
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, the taste of beauty is variable. It is not surprising that fad clothes are suitable for some while others seem inappropriate.
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, almost fashionable clothes are designed for the model with outstanding physical beauty whereas people with some disadvantages about
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appearance, such
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 are height or weight have to find suitable clothes for them.
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therefore
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, finding clothes
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are
 suitable for the current condition is much more important than following the newest trend. As suggested above, wearing fad clothes, add
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 of confidence for an individual, especially at the edge of the visual image.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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