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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to the advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The reduction in
crime
 rates has been observed with the improvement in technology, it helps in avoiding and solving
crime
.
This
 essay agrees with the statement as, advanced technologies help us to track and observe any criminal activity and
also
 with improved technologies we have a better defence system to help fight
crime
 efficiently. Prevention is better than cure. The best way to handle
crime
 is to avoid it. Now a day, we have cameras everywhere, keeping track of the activity of each and every
person
. By keeping a
person
 to monitor these cameras we can easily avoid criminal actions.
Also
, if police want to confirm any previous criminal activity that can
also
 be done,
hence
 helps to solve
crime
Suggestion
crimes
a crime
. A research has shown that with the increase in surveillance cameras
,
Accept space
,
there has been a 30 % reduction in
crime
 rated in those areas
,
Accept space
,
 as it creates a feeling in
person
 that someone always watching you. Defence is another critical point to consider, while dealing with
crime
. With the advanced technology we have a better defence system to fight the attacker. A recent study has shown that, with the improvement in defence technologies, there is a 40 % reduction in casualties while fighting
crime
. The impact of loss of man in the organization is not only a loss of resource, but
also
, the experience and knowledge a
person
 had. To conclude, new technologies help to tackle any difficult situation smartly be it preventing
crime
 or dealing with
crime
. Though criminals are
also
 getting equally capable of advanced
crime
, but the benefits are more than the loopholes.
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