Studies have shown that in many countries the income gap between the rich and poor is ever increasing. What problems can arise from this situation and what could be done to address this situation?

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Nowdays
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Nowadays
the gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider unfortunately.The rich
is becoming
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are becoming
have become
richer, and the poor are getting even poorer.
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, a lot of studies have shown that already.There is no doubt that
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situation
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can
be cause
for the reason that; on account of
because
of serious problems and is affecting our way of life. I am inclined to believe that the most dangerous
problem
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that can arise from
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situation
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is
high level
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a high level
of a poverty.
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, the
problem
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is
particulary
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
particularly
acute
for
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in
countries without strong welfare. People need basic norms for a comfortable life. Whereas, сountry which consists little percent of the rich and
exeedingly
to an extreme degree
exceedingly
huge number of the poor
,
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,
simply
can not
can not
cannot
give basic norms for a comfortable life to the citizens.
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,
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,
there exists another
problem
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which can be triggered by the income gap between the rich and poor. As a consequence
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,
poor people can vigorously decide to solve
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problem
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. Riots and rebellions will be the solution.
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idea can ignites in people’s heads.
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Albeit
, Riots and rebellions can make
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situation
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the situation
even worse, the poor people can undertake
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problem
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in
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way. Previously,
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have to concede that
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particular
problem
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is very challenging to solve.
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, there are two important things that could be done to address
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situation
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.
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of all economically prosperous countries with a strong welfare should help poor countries to solve
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problem
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.
Secondly
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, governments should not be dormant to the
problem
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.
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proficient
polliticians
a leader engaged in civil administration
politicians
politician
and active part of society should take on
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challenge.
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it is significantly difficult, it
shold
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should
be done. Eventually, a
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a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standard
of living can be advanced.
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