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Writing Samples
Band 8

You are interested in applying for a job at an international company where a friend of yours works. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter -Tell your friend about the job you are interested in -Explain why you are interested in applying for it -Ask your friend for some advice about applying for this job

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Dear Sam, I hope you're doing well; as a friend, I am interested in applying for a job at your company. Recently, I completed my advanced diploma in computer system design, mastering cloud computing and network management.
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, My recent internship qualified me to work with professional specialists and multinational institutes. Fortunately, I remember you being an employee of an international company which is well-known for advanced cloud management and data analysis. For that, I would like to apply for the junior data analyst position in one of your cloud data management departments. Getting hired by a well-reputed enterprise would significantly boost my computer skills and provide deep insight into current trends and standards operating in the digital world. I would like to receive non-confidential information
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 any useful advice that might help me prepare for a job interview with the manager. I hope to work as an employee with you in the same building in the future. Take care, Raj.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down your points into clearer, more focused paragraphs, especially separating your interest in the job from your skills and experiences.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your sentences flow logically to enhance overall clarity. For example, linking your qualifications directly to the position should be clear.
task achievement
You have a warm and friendly tone that is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
You clearly mentioned the job position you are interested in and your reasons for wanting to apply.
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