It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children? Give reason for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Brain of a child is like
molding
the act of creating something by casting it in a mold
moulding
clay, which can take any shape. It is very much required to make young generation aware of right and wrong,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
at
early stage
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early stages
an early stage
the early stage
. I would
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that
punshment
the act of punishing
punishment
to teach good manners is
age old practice
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an age old practice
the age old practice
which might be effective in certain
cases but
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cases, but
now in these changing world where
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
have
beacame
enter or assume a certain state or condition
become
more interactive and understanding. In Today's world kids have more freedom of asking question exploring things than it use to be twenty years back. Teaching
patterens
a perceptual structure
patterns
patients
also
have changed a
lot which
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lot, which
means
its
it is
it's
a two way communication. Most of the
times
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time
teachers just allowed to
advice
give advice to
advise
if a student
bahaviour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
is wrong. With the help of technology things have become
easy
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easier
for parents and teachers
to explain
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explain
difference
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the difference
between right and wrong.
Rewards
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The rewards
are
considerd
carefully weighed
considered
consider
to be more effective for
young one's
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a young one's
the young one's
to make them understand good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Giving punishment to children at
early age
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an early age
is
very serious crime
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a very serious crime
in most of the
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
counties
centres
accross
to the opposite side
across
the
world but
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world, but
there are
few exception
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a few exceptions
few exceptions
on which there is no alternative
on
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to
this
. Only in extreme condition where all the other alternatives have already utilized. To
conclude we
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conclude, we
can say that good behaviour of
child
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a child
the child
children
is always
depands
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depends
depend
on
relation
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the relation
relations
with his family and teachers. Most of the time simple
explaination
a statement that makes something comprehensible by describing the relevant structure or operation or circumstances etc.
explanation
explanations
of end results
help
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helps
child to decide
difference
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the difference
between good and bad.
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