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Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is often seen that many people are living with a long life span. With
this
, others suggest that the
retirement
age
 of a person should be gradually raised. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and I think that one’s
retirement
age
 should not be raised. In
this
 essay, the various reasons for
this
 opinion will be explained in detail.
First
, raising a person’s
retirement
age
 does not give a reassurance of
work
 productivity. With the increasing number of physically demanding jobs, an old employee engaged in
this
 kind of
work
 may not be able to fulfil the physical responsibilities for the position. For instance, a person who works in the construction field is required to be well-conditioned and strong to be able to do heavy lifting and building. If a person is at the
age
 of 60 and is still doing the same construction
job
, it may be challenging for him to complete physical demanding tasks since his body is not as strong compared to his younger days. With
this
, the efficiency of getting jobs completed will be at risk since some older aged people are not as resilient to engage in physically demanding jobs. The other reason why a person’s
retirement
age
 must not be raised is to give opportunities to younger people looking for
work
. It is a known fact that young people who seek employment find it challenging to get a
job
.
For example
, a young educator may find it very difficult to get a
job
 as a teacher-aide in a primary school since most teachers-aide positions may be filled with retirees. With
this
, the opportunity to gain experience in a primary school setting becomes scarce since
job
 vacancies are not paramount for young
job
 seekers.  In conclusion, extending the
age
 of
retirement
 may cause a decrease in
work
 productivity especially for older people.
Furthermore
, raising the
retirement
age
 may
also
 cause young people to have difficulties in finding
job
 opportunities.
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