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Some people think that developments involving the internet have brought people closer together while other think that people and communities have become more isolated.

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In recent years, the
Internet
 has an extreme increase in quality and quantity of users and plays an important indispensable role in human society. Many people think that
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 brought them an easy and convenient way to communicate and connect people while others think that it may create a distance in our society. The
Internet
 is a powerful and convenient tool, but, in my opinion, it prevents us from reality interact and may lead social isolation. On the one hand, the thought that
internet
 brings people closer together is reasonable. One of the undeniable benefits of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is connecting people. Thanks to
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, people now can work and correspond easier. It provides facilities to create online meeting and long-distance video calls.
As a result
, people now can work and talk face-to-face from
this
 hemisphere to another.
On the other hand
, I believe that communities nowadays are more and more distant from each other.
Firstly
, because of the benefits of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, people now prefer social network conversation to reality conversation. They can talk to others whenever they want, they can search everything they need,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 brought to them every knowledge and information, so there is no reason for a hangout or a conversation in the real life.
Consequently
, it may lead to the reduction of communication ability in the
next
 generation.
Secondly
, the
internet
 gives them tons of information every
second
, so that people keep surfing on the
internet
, they do not want to be outdated, they always lack information and want to be up to date.
Therefore
, the more time they spend on the
internet
, the less time they spend on the reality. In conclusion,
although
 there are undeniable benefits of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, there is still the risk of leading communities’ isolation.
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