The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.
The graphs bellows indicate the
value
of
food
,
fuel
, manufactured
goods
and the total
value
of exports by one country between 2000 and 2005. In general,
the
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fuel
was
significant
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a significant
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decrease from 2000 to 2005
while
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food
was not a lot of changes, but the manufactured fluctuated by each year. In 2000,
the
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fuel
was highest
about
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at about
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45000
million
dollars
,
meanwhile
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the numbers for
food
export was lowest
under
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at under
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10000
million
dollars
. The manufactured
goods
at about 15000
million
dollars
. In 2002, the
value
of
fuel
exported dropped to 30000
millions
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million
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dollars
while
the
value
of manufactured
goods
increased to 25000
million
dollars
. And manufactured
goods
were reaching the highest export amount in years. By 2005,
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manufactured
goods
were
highest
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the highest
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good in all exports. Over
this
period of five years, the figures for
fuel
and
manufactured
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manufacturing
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fluctuated,
whereas
the figures for
food
export remained almost stable at under 10000
million
dollars
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, food, fuel, goods, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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