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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.
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The graphs bellows indicate the
value
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 of
food
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,
fuel
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, manufactured
goods
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 and the total
value
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 of exports by one country between 2000 and 2005. In general,
the
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fuel
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 was
significant
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a significant
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 decrease from 2000 to 2005
while
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the
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food
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 was not a lot of changes, but the manufactured fluctuated by each year. In 2000,
the
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fuel
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 was highest
about
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at about
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 45000
million
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dollars
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,
meanwhile
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 the numbers for
food
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 export was lowest
under
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at under
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 10000
million
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dollars
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. The manufactured
goods
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 at about 15000
million
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dollars
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. In 2002, the
value
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 of
fuel
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 exported dropped to 30000
millions
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million
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dollars
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while
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 the
value
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 of manufactured
goods
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 increased to 25000
million
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dollars
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. And manufactured
goods
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 were reaching the highest export amount in years. By 2005,
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manufactured
goods
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 were
highest
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the highest
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 good in all exports. Over
this
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 period of five years, the figures for
fuel
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 and
manufactured
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manufacturing
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 fluctuated,
whereas
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 the figures for
food
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 export remained almost stable at under 10000
million
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dollars
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, food, fuel, goods, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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