The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.
The graphs bellows indicate the
value
of food
, fuel
, manufactured goods
and the total value
of exports by one country between 2000 and 2005.
In general, the
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fuel
was significant
decrease from 2000 to 2005 Add an article
a significant
while
the
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food
was not a lot of changes, but the manufactured fluctuated by each year.
In 2000, the
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fuel
was highest about
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at about
million
dollars
, meanwhile
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,meanwhile
food
export was lowest under
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at under
million
dollars
. The manufactured goods
at about 15000 million
dollars
.
In 2002, the value
of fuel
exported dropped to 30000 millions
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million
dollars
while
the value
of manufactured goods
increased to 25000 million
dollars
. And manufactured goods
were reaching the highest export amount in years.
By 2005, the
manufactured Correct article usage
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goods
were highest
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the highest
this
period of five years, the figures for fuel
and manufactured
fluctuated, Replace the word
manufacturing
whereas
the figures for food
export remained almost stable at under 10000 million
dollars
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