The growing population is a big problem in developing countries. Should the government provide new homes in the cities or countryside?

population explosion
Suggestion
The population explosion
Population explosion
is one of
most signifacnt problem
Suggestion
the most significant problem
most significant problem
of those kind of countries who are developing. As an
usaul
occurring or encountered or experienced or observed frequently or in accordance with regular practice or procedure
usual
supporter " Government" could provide new house in around the cities. In
this
essay, I intend to investigate some drawbacks of
this
solution that I believe that,
this
is not a
goold
having desirable or positive qualities especially those suitable for a thing specified
good
gold
food
way for solving
this
issue easily.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all, one of the common
way
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ways
to solve
this
issue is building
vertical house
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a vertical house
that it could
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
hundreds poeple
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a hundred people
hundreds people
hundred people
hundred poeple
in a small part of
land
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the land
.
unfortunatley
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Unfortunately
Unfortunatley
, as it is easy to build them around the cities, it would have many
inconveniece
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inconveniences
inconvenience
for their
inhabitat
a person who inhabits a particular place
inhabitant
.
For instance
, lack of public transportation in these places would be an important problem to
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
dislike to live in
this
part of town.
Thus
, it is better to
first
think about making
good rout
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a good rout
the good rout
with a perfect
vehicles
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vehicle
as public transportations and
then
decide to build these vertical
skycrapers
a very tall building with many stories
skyscrapers
.
Secondly
, another major
factors
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factor
which is very important for children is lack of parks or special places as entertainment.
Neverthelesss
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Nevertheless
, living in a cheap
accomidation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
would be good, in these new places could not be enough green places as park for children.
surely
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Surely
, good
ergonomy
Suggestion
ergonomics
ergonomic
for children in their growing up ways should be considered by
government
Suggestion
the government
in making decision to provide
new home
Suggestion
a new home
new homes
for civics. To conclude, in the reality, it is an indisputable issue for government in
third
-world nation to solve increasing population with building
new house
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new houses
a new house
in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
.
nontheless
Suggestion
Nonetheless
Nontheless
, I restate again that it would have many drawbacks
such
as lack of public transportation and entertainment place for children that should be considered by city experts in the future.
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