ChatGPT Some people believe that in order to reduce the rising obesity among children the school administration should make it necessary for every child to participate in sports and other outdoor activities.
Obesity
among youngsters has increased and spread in recent years, without a doubt. The school
should participate by having the administration play a role in reducing the largest number of obesity
cases, which can be accomplished by increasing children
's participation in school
festivals and outdoor activities. While
it is widely believed that the goal of schools
is to focus on children
's performance. Obesity
among children
is an important topic for discussion and analysis. In my opinion, schools
can control rising obesity
rates and seek to lower them through a variety of efficient strategies.
To begin
with, there are vast methods that can work effectively to reduce the numbers of obesity
among children
. First of all, schools
could provide compulsory sports
classes, which will make the children
marked and graded based on their performance. Furthermore
, schools
could make competitions among children
that may attract them to participate in it. In other words
, if there is a reward for the children
who win in a competition, this
will promote the challenge and motivate children
to participate. For example
, my young sister participated in a running competition at her school
, and the winner got a trophy as a reward.
Another point to consider is the necessity of having a society without obesity
, which is a significant thing that should focus on from the school
side and the parent side alike. Moreover
, doubtfully, children
spend most of their time at school
, and by this
, schools
influence their needs and demands by keeping the sports
part of children
's lives. Ultimately, providing sports
lessons and sessions for children
in the school
should encourage their parents to motivate their children
to participate in those lessons.
In conclusion, despite having different views. I believe that encouraging the children
to participate in the sports
sessions at the school
will impact their health in a positive way for the future.Submitted by walkuwari11 on
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