if a product is good or it meets people will buy it. so advertisement is unnecessary and no more than entertainment . To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Change is
spice
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the spice
of life and in every
age we
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age, we
noticed so many changes. Gone are the days least amount of advertising telecasted
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now technology has more advanced and advertising has become an industry
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It has been put forward that advertising is unnecessary and it is only for entertainment
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I disagree with
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statement. The major reason behind why advertising is
essential
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essentially
the
first
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and foremost reason is advertising tell us about the new products
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,
they
also
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provide information about how to use the products
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Individual have more choices before making a purchase
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They discuss with family and friends about new products
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Besides
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this
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if a businessman does not advertise their products
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,
then
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the product would need a long time to become popular in all over world advertising help to businessman to sell their products which improve the overall economy of
nation
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the nation
a nation
nations
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However advertising
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However, advertising
is no more than entertainment. To get our attention in
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first place advertisement
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a first place advertisement
needs to be
a
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an
entertaining
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while some ads purely focus on facts
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we
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We
are likely to be more interested in beautiful graphics or impressive music and pictures
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These
days many
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days, many
people send links of interesting movies to their friends
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Advertisers tries to profit from
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behaviour by creating entertaining movie people enjoy watching and sharing. To conclude
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the above-mentioned argument in a
nutshell it
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nutshell, it
can be acknowledged that adverts are salient part of our world which provide information about
product
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products
the product
and knowledge about health
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but
advertisement
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advertisements
are unnecessary which designate hazardous issues.
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