if a product is good or it meets people will buy it. so advertisement is unnecessary and no more than entertainment . To what extent do you agree or disagree

#product #people #advertisement #entertainment

Change is

spice

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the spice

of life and in every

age we

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age, we

noticed so many changes. Gone are the days least amount of advertising telecasted

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now technology has more advanced and advertising has become an industry

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It has been put forward that advertising is unnecessary and it is only for entertainment

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I disagree with

this

statement. The major reason behind why advertising is

essential

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essentially

the

first

and foremost reason is advertising tell us about the new products

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they

also

provide information about how to use the products

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Individual have more choices before making a purchase

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They discuss with family and friends about new products

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Besides

this

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if a businessman does not advertise their products

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then

the product would need a long time to become popular in all over world advertising help to businessman to sell their products which improve the overall economy of

nation

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the nation

a nation

nations

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However advertising

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However, advertising

is no more than entertainment. To get our attention in

first place advertisement

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a first place advertisement

needs to be

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entertaining

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while some ads purely focus on facts

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are likely to be more interested in beautiful graphics or impressive music and pictures

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These

days many

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days, many

people send links of interesting movies to their friends

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Advertisers tries to profit from

this

behaviour by creating entertaining movie people enjoy watching and sharing. To conclude

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the above-mentioned argument in a

nutshell it

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nutshell, it

can be acknowledged that adverts are salient part of our world which provide information about

product

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products

the product

and knowledge about health

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but

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

262 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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