The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
The table compares the
number
of workers in ten different industries, divided into three groups of
age
.
Overall
, the
number
of
people
joining the manufacturing, agriculture, local government, and education sectors
increase
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with
ages
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age
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whereas
the trend of retail and other
ones
is reversed, making an exception
of
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for
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catering, health, law, and accountancy.
The manufacturing
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is the most popular among
people
over 40, with 23
people
recruited, which approximately doubles the
number
of
youngest
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the youngest
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ones
.
Similarly
, 18 workers of the oldest group of
age
work in local government, compared to only 8
ones
under 25. Education and Agriculture follow a similar pattern, but on a lower scale.
By contrast
, retail and other sectors are selected most by the youngest employees. Regarding retails,
this
group of
age
gains 23
people
,
while
13
people
are relatively equally divided between
two
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the two
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remaining categories. Meanwhile, the
number
of
people
working in other industries decrease by
age
, from 21
people
under 25, plunging to 9
ones
over 40.
Two
aforementioned patterns are not reflected in others. A few more
people
in
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between
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the
age
between 25 and 40 than the
number
in
two
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the two
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other groups of
age
are employed in catering and health. Meanwhile, three
age
categories equally contribute 4
people
to Law sectors.
Conversely
, each of
youngest
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and oldest groups has 3 accountants, in comparison with only
two
people
in the rest of
ages
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the ages
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, age, people, ones, two with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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