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Nowadays, there has been a rise in the number of nuclear families as compared to the extended families. While having a small family can be beneficial in many ways such as financial stability and access to better and quality education, the

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Nowadays, there has been a rise in the number of nuclear families as compared to the extended families. While having a small family can be beneficial in many
ways
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ways, such
such
 as financial stability and access to better and quality
education
, there are some considerable drawback. Nuclear family on the one hand makes it easier for the household to achieve a better and a more sustainable financial stability
as a result
 of the number of people to be catered for.
For instance
, In a small family where both
parent
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parents
 work, they are able to provide all the support and luxuries their family requires and able to save funds while planning for their future needs.
Also
, having
this
 type of family will allow the parent to provide a high standard
education
 for the kids because the increasing cost of quality
education
 has made it difficult for a medium income earner to afford.
Therefore
, a family with small members would be able to save more money and provide
this
 for their kids.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks to having a small sized
family
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family, such
such
 as having a small support system. In emergency situations
such
 as an accident or even in the time of illness, it becomes increasingly difficult to meet the family’s expectations and
needs especially
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needs, especially
 in instances where both are working and have young children to look after. In conclusion, while it can be advantageous to have a small household because of its less financial stress and access to qualitative
education
, having a small support group can serve as a major drawback.
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