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Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think the role of a parent should be in their child’s education?

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Parents can have crucial roles in their children’s
education
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. They can
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motivate
 their children about their results at
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, and they can force them to study hard, which can have many side effects on them. It is on the one hand obvious that some parents think if their children get better marks at
school
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, they can have better lives in the future. Some parents opine putting pressure on children causes
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to get
 better results at
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. These parents are not
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 aware of the side effects of
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 method. They
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 believe if their children cannot get full marks at
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, they will not have bright futures. Taking a weak student as a clear example; their parents may think their son will not be successful in the future unless he passes all
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 subjects with high marks, in
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 case, parents force him to perform more than his capability. It is
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 clear that parents have major roles in children’s
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. One of the most important roles that parents can play in their child’s
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 is motivating them. Parents can
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 teach their children that there is always room for improvement in their work in courses. They can
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 guide their children through their
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 subjects. A girl having learning difficulty in mathematics can be an example; her parents can motivate that girl to deal with the learning difficulty in some practical ways. In conclusion, parents have determined roles in their child’s
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. Some parents want to guarantee their children’s futures by putting pressure on them, but I personally believe, parents can motivate children to learn
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 subjects by their hearts which is a more practical way than putting pressure on them.
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