Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?

Celebrated personalities tend to
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collect or gather
amass
amaze
amuse
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Accept space
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Accept space
(
a
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A
degree of
disposible
free or available for use or disposition
disposable
income) or
(
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(
disposable income in bulk).
Such
wealth allows them to be, as "happy as Larry".
Howbeit
, it is
persumed
take to be the case or to be true; accept without verification or proof
presumed
that their material wealth oftentimes causes them to
bide
stick to firmly
bind
build
melancholy life. I tend to concur with
this
statement. I will be pleased to discuss with you, why these types of people tend to pay a heavy price for public adulation in the following paragraphs. Being popular means, to be widely known and be in
highlights
Suggestion
the highlights
for your every action. Which means the privacy in their lives is non existent.
For instance
, if Kim Kardashian wears a bikini and steps out on the
beches
an area of sand sloping down to the water of a sea or lake
beaches
of
miami
a member of the extinct Algonquian people formerly living in northern Indiana and southern Michigan
Miami
to catch some sun, the whole world is going to know about it. Or If
salman
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Salman
khan
a title given to rulers or other important people in Asian countries
Khan
heads out for cycling,
picturs
a visual representation (of an object or scene or person or abstraction) produced on a surface
pictures
of him are going to be splashed in
the the
definite article
the
tabloids.
Likewise
, being a star one has to be extremely patient with the public judgements as they are constantly judged.
Moreover
, a celebrity status attracts too many fake friends. Who just for the sake of seeking attention and enjoying the bounties of elite class tries to
befriends
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be friends
with them resulting stars to be all alone. They have no sincere shoulder to rest their head on. Being famous seems to have its perks as well: oodles of diehard fans, to get whatever one wishes to have getting special treatments and stuff like that. Anyhow, handling all of
this
: being in
news
Suggestion
the news
for everything, unable to enjoy leisure time, being asked for a
slefie
free from danger or the risk of harm
safe
whenever in public, some celebrities manages to dwell a gleeful life. To illustrate
this
, Kylie Jener and The Beckhams Family are the best examples. Eventually, according to my notion no matter how healthy and fresh celebrities may look on
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camera, but
camera but
behind the curtains they all are normal beings who wants their personal space to be respected
aswell
Suggestion
as well
.
For
example if
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example, if
any celebrity gives birth to a newborn they prefer to keep their newborn's identity hidden for some
reasons despite
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reasons, despite
that media still
stucks
an implement consisting of a length of wood
sticks
stuck
sucks
like a dog's tail just for the sake of
flourushing
very lively and profitable
flourishing
their business and spills the beans.
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