Some people argue that in the modern world it is necessary to be able to speak at least two foreign languages. Others say that it is better to know one foreign language very well than to have poor command of two foreign languages. What is your opinion?

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In most cases you have heard about the benefits of learning another
language
– good for your degree, good for your travels, good for your career – some people seem to think that being multilingual isn’t all that important anymore. We’re here to remind you that not only is it important, it may very well be necessary. It’s true that there are more and more people learning and speaking
English
these days. In fact,
English
is,
according to
some measures, the most widely spoken
language
in the world, the de facto lingua franca. Approximately 1.5 billion people around the world speak
English
, whether as their native tongue or as a foreign
language
, and
this
number is still growing. I have been learning
English
for five years consciously for myself. And I want to say
English
like my second
language
which I can use for free. Now I don’t consider
English
as some kind of achievement.
This
is my life. Because I have a lot of foreign friends who I only speak
English
with. I traveled a lot and I don’t know how I would have been without
English
.I can speak German.
This
is my third
language
. I’m very glad. I learn German to study and to know. After all,
language
opens up for you just a huge number of doors and opportunities. Thanks to the fact that I’m learning German, I had the experience of
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abroad school where I spent all
last
summer. And I can say for sure that these were the best days of my life. In conclusion,
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in the
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it is no longer cool to know one foreign
language
, it's fascinating to know five or more.
Language
is not something complicated, rather it is what you need to spend your time on. Thanks to my parents who support me and
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me
this
opportunity. I’m sixteen and I know three languages I can speak fluently . I can do more, I know! I learn Italian and Polish. Because
this
is my life and I want to invest in it to the fullest.
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task response
The essay provides a clear response to the prompt by discussing the importance of being multilingual in the modern world. Make sure to directly address the arguments presented in the prompt and offer a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the discussion on the importance of learning multiple languages. Consider refining the thesis statement to clearly outline your stance on the topic.

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