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The pie charts below show unites of electricity production by fuel sources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show unites of electricity production by fuel sources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts below illustrate Units of electricity by fuel sources in
Australia
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 and
France
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 in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
amount
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the
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Natural Gas and Oil decreased significantly in
Australia
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 and the
amount
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Coal increased and doubled from 50 to 130 in 2000.
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, the
amount
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Natural Gas declined in
France
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,
while
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 the production of
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Oil increased. Total production in 1980 was 100
unites
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 and
this
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amount
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 increased dramatically to 170 units in
Australia
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 and the same thing is to be seen in
France
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. From 1980 to 90
unites
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 and
a
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doubled in 2000 with 180 units. One of the sources that
France
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 uses in order to make electricity was Nuclear Power which was 15 in 1980 and increased dramatically to 126 in 2000,
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, there is no Nuclear Power as a source in
Australia
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. The
Hydro power
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Hydropower
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 remained relatively steady and increased slightly from 5 to 2.
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Coal rose significantly in
Australia
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,
it
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and it
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 remained exactly
same
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the same
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 in
France
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, france, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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