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It is generally believed that the education is of vital importance to the development of individualsa nd well being of societies what should education consist of to fullfill both these functio

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Education
 is a powerful weapon which helps to change the world. In yester years, theoretical
knowledge
 was provided to children. Whereas, the nowadays
education
 sector has developed a lot, which is beneficial for
society
. There are a number of functions which should be involved in it and benefits for
society
 as well as individuals. I shall discuss these functions in the upcoming paragraphs. The major function which involved in
education
 develops personal traits.
For instance
, when schools should provide
knowledge
 related to social skills as well as better communication skills to children and they can learn ethical values and do respect to all folks and
also
 will reduce crime in the
society
.
Besides
this
, professional
knowledge
. A good illustration
that is
education
 should provide work related
knowledge
 children settle their future and it is
also
 beneficial for
society
.
Furthermore
,
education
 should involve physical
education
. It helps the children to leave fit mentally as well as physically.
In addition
 to that the other function is environmental
knowledge
. It is a commonly seen that there are a number of environmental problems is increasing day by day to overcome these problems government should involve environment
knowledge
 in the
education
.
Therefore
, children will get aware about environmental problems.
Furthermore
, the administration should involve extra curriculum activities. It helps the children to reduce their academic burden and children will try to find a new talent. To sum up, in
education
 should involve all functions which is beneficial for
society
 as well as individual
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