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computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, electrical facilities have dominated business and education. Schools have encountered the issue of utilizing computers as a vital part of education. There are rational arguments on both sides of
this
 topic which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own point of view. On the one hand, there are those reasoning that the schools should adapt their system as well as teacher to use new equipments
such
 as computers, iPads and smartphones for the sake of developing education.
That is
 to say, computers not only can facilitate the quality of lessons, but can help classes to not be boring for students. In the meantime, the students can take part virtually in classes, even though they couldn't attend in reality.
for
Suggestion
For
 example, Take having social distance because of Covid-19 as an example; schools have held their programs to some extent by using computers, which is much better than shout down all classes.
On the other hand
, the opposing view asserts that computer decrease the quality of teaching.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, simply put, by using the computer the concentration of the student can decrease as if it can affect their learning. A good example of
this
 is some students use computers for playing games rather than using them for studying.
Therefore
, the more computers for teaching, the less efficacy of learning. To conclude, there are reasoning on both sides on the controversy;
however
, it is my opinion that attention should be paid to employ computers and electronic facilities in classes due to the fact that they are really one of the incorporating parts of today's lifestyle and every school needs them to enhance the efficacy of the programs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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