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You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: Apologize for the damage to the item Explain what happened Say how you are going to fix the issue

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Dear Alya, I borrowed a
bracelet
 from you recently. I know you bought that
bracelet
 with great pleasure. When I borrowed it from you, I said I would look after it carefully. I used it very carefully, constantly checking whether it was on my wrist or not. When I was at the show there was nothing. When I
go to
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went
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 home and took it
of
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off
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, I noticed that one stone was missing. I am very sorry for
this
 situation. I thought a lot about what to do about
this
. I went to the place you bought it from and looked, but they said they did not have the same
bracelet
 left. The officer working there said that she brought it upon order. I placed an order and she said it would arrive next week. I will call you next week when your
bracelet
 arrives. I am really sorry for
this
 situation. I hope you forgive me.
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coherence cohesion
The letter's paragraphs should be clearer and focus on one idea each for better reader understanding.
task achievement
Ensure that all parts of the task are covered thoroughly.
coherence cohesion
The letter begins and ends with appropriate and polite greeting and closing.
task achievement
The apology is expressed sincerely, which is suitable for the context and tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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