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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers in education system?

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Nowadays computers have become a mainstay in
education system
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the education system
, but it has certain drawbacks too.
This
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of computers in
education system
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the education system
 and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages of having computers in
education system
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the education system
 are easy access to different resources in the world and a method for recreation along with
education
.
Firstly
, with the help of computers we can have access to
wide variety
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a wide variety
 of contents with just a single click. Without computers
this
 would not have been possible. Taking an example of e-libraries, millions of books and journal are available and students can make maximum use of it by just typing what they want and
moreover
,
this
 saves
lot
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a lot
 of time and reduces their effort.
Secondly
, computers
also
 provide
variety
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a variety
 of recreational activities in terms of games and puzzles. When students are tired and want to have a break, they can use computer for watching any movie or a TV show and
this
 way computers
also
 act as a stress buster. Now coming to the negative aspect of computers, excessive use of computers is not conducive to the heath and excessive dependency on computer hampers our mental ability to think independently. Sitting in front of computers for long durations may have
negative affect
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a negative effect
negative effect
negative effects
 on the eyes and as well as the spine which in
long term
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the long term
 leads to chronic problems.
Also
, it
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 our ability to think independently and we become slaves of the machine. To conclude,
although
 computers have certain negative effects like deteriorating health and dependency, it has a positive outcome when it comes to having access to the content worldwide and is
also
 a sources of relaxation
.
Accept space
.
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