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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 contemporary era of information and technology, women empowerment is at its Zenith. There seems to be a school of thought possessing the belief for an equal share of university
enrollment
 for both the sexes in all the fields.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 notion and will state my reasons in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, there does not exist any official quota for male and female sexes in any level of education in most of the nations worldwide.
For instance
, only the marks and credentials of the students are taken into consideration during the admission process.
This
 has resulted in
abolished
Suggestion
abolishing
 sexual discrimination, instilling an environment of equality and common grounds for both the sexes.
Moreover
, it has
lead
Suggestion
led
 to increased women
enrollment
into
Suggestion
in
 tertiary education and boosted
women
Suggestion
women's
employment especially
Accept comma addition
employment, especially
 in the economically and socially backward countries, which ultimately aids to support women empowerment at its core.
Secondly
, there should be made
social
Suggestion
socially
 reforms made to uplift the underprivileged and backward castes of the nation
instead
 of gender preferences. One great example of
this
 implementation is in India, where there has been made several reservation categories for different castes in tertiary education fields as well as vocational opportunities.
As a result
, there has been a substantial growth among the less privileged societies of India making their competency at par with the rich and well-to-do citizens. To conclude, I completely oppose the statement of
having an equal number of male and female university students be
Suggestion
were an equal number of male and female university students
having an equal number of male and female university students be
 it of any subject due to obvious reasons mentioned above.
In addition
, the government
should create
Accept comma addition
should, create
 social, educational and vocational reforms targeted towards the underprivileged citizens of the society to create justice and a levelled playing field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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