You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear John, I am writing

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letter with great pleasure to give you career advice and will

definately

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definitely

suggest

you

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apply

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the best possible solution according to my aura. As per my understanding, I would ask you to go for

job

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a job

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as you have plentiful knowledge of engines and

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the mechanical

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sector so you should not waste time

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getting a piece of paper from university. Needless to say, I noticed you are keen

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cars from childhood and love to explore their functionality in detail. The hobby of grabbing minor studies perfectly makes you

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develop into an outstanding mechanic who is repairing and servicing home and

neigbourhood

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neighbourhood

vehicles from teenage. I am sure that you already know well about

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field and

well

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versed enough to use these rich skills in

market

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the market

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to earn some money. I would suggest

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for

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a job

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without a single thought as you are the perfect fit for any workshop and

college

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degree would only waste taste,money and other resources.

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, I would like to remind you that your parents have a huge loan and they are in debt

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last

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decade. You are the only hope to avoid family bankruptcy and

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the

necessaties

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necessities

of life as you have

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sister who

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need

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financial support for basic primary school education. Please write me down if you require any kind of help. I would love to hearing from you soon regarding your decision. Thank you, Best Wishes Peter

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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8 paragraphs

245 words

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Real-world experience
Practical experience
Financial independence
On-the-job training
Student loan debt
Personal growth
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Career development
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Job market
Career goals
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Market demand
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