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In some countries police officers do not carry guns. How does this affect the manner they implement law and order? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a gun. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In a few nations
police
 officers don't carry weapons. Every aware that
police
Suggestion
the police
 are the main force for controlling law and play a crucial part in the preservation of the Lex in countries. It is argued that it is good to have ammunition because of self-
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
 from law-defying persons, but we need to consider
disadvantages
Suggestion
the disadvantages
 as improper use of arsenal to a peaceful citizen. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both benefits and drawbacks of having a gun.
Firstly
, one of the big advantages of the bearing of arms is the self-protection from a criminal. The world has an enormous number of situations when offenders or persons assault civilians with a weapon and in
this
 case act defenders are necessary to gain ammunition to protect people.
it’s
Suggestion
It’s
 calmer for individuals when law authorization organizations have weapons with them and they feel ensured and believe them with their lives.
For example
, in the 2018
year according
Accept comma addition
year, according
 to statistics more than 500 thousand armed robbery happened.
Moreover
, it might be more and from that, we can understand that the
police
 need weapons.
On the other hand
, the biggest disadvantage of acquiring a weapon is abusing it for other purposes. The reason is, mental disorders or increased powers that create a sense of control over others and,
as a result
, confidence in the
police
 is lost. There can be other reasons for depriving of credibility as not the confidence of workers, but the main reason is because of having an arsenal. In conclusion, considering all written above, authorities should consider the pros and cons and make the right decisions at the expense of their citizens.
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