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Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?

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There are people who think that children are getting free
time
 a lot more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 they need and they think that
instead
 that
time
 should be spent on education or work given by the school. In
this
 essay I would like to express my point of view and talk about how they should use their free
time
 with relevant examples.
Firstly
, children should have free
time
, because it helps them to grow. I agree education is important, but if the child is all ways learning and stuck with books they don'
t
 go into other fields.
For instance
, they young ones who are all ways study and ignore other
activity even
Accept comma addition
activity, even
 in their free
time
, they do become smarter
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 other but they will be in loss of what is the quality of
life
 and other entertainment in their
life
. So with education, having free
time
 to do other
activity
such
 as sport, painting, etc. Helps them to make them grow more mature.
Secondly
, I think children should have a balance between study and their free
time
. If they have proper balance
then
 they won'
t
 miss out on both things. If they spend too much
time
 on free
time
 and don'
t
 do their study,
that is
also
 a loss and they want to achieve success in their
life
.
For example
, in reviewing USA children, mainly boys spend lots of
time
 playing video games, due to which it is hard for them to sit in class or do their school work which will affect their
later
Suggestion
later life
life
 later when they grow as they won'
t
 have a proper job and lack of confidence. So playing video game and spending free
time
 by doing other activities like playing football, cricket or painting, dancing is different. Doing an outdoor
activity
 is the best way to spend their
time
, as it make their mind, refresh and stress free due to which they will be able to consecrate on their course and
also
 keep them healthy. To summarize, as there is saying " Education is the key to success", it does, but it doesn'
t
 mean that whole day we should spend in front of books. We should involve use in other
activity
 so we learn new things and educate our self with a variety of
life
 experiences.
Such
 as one can learn swimming, or playing sport so later they can be good at.
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