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As computers arr being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role fir teachers in the classroom

#computers #arr #education #role #fir #teachers #classroom
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21st century
Suggestion
The 21st century
 is modern technology. Nowadays
peopl
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 more rely on the technology. The education field
also
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 more dependent on computer base education.
Although
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 many people believe that computers are will be take place of teachers and no
tole
an implement used in the practice of a vocation
tool
 for teachers in schools or universities. I think in a revers manner and
disagrree
a position on a scale of intensity or amount or quality
degree
disagree
to
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of
 the given statement. My inclination is justified in the following paragraph
First
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 of all, many people and students nowadays depending on computer studies, computer are
play
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playing
 big
role
Use synonyms
 in
studies but
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studies, but
 it's
not prove
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didn't prove
not proving
 that teachers are not required. Still, huge pupils believed in original study method, there are
lot
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a lot
lots
 of reasons
such
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 as interaction with humans are more convenient
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
machine
Suggestion
a machine
. Computers give suggestion to students and understand their level or study
capacity but
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capacity, but
 like teacher never understand
thwt
pointing out something
that
 students are paying attention or not. The other reason to prove my point, when student started
study
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studying
 they started
interact
Suggestion
interacting
 with people and they developed the skills
such
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 as how to work in
group
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groups
a group
the group
..? How to respect the person and other group members.? Human interfere are must required in the classroom, while the guidelines by
teachers students
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teachers, students
 influence them in
posstive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 path. The foremost argument
do
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does
 is teachers play an important
role
Use synonyms
 in
classroom
Suggestion
the classroom
 no matter of advance technology because of human in
classrooms they
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classrooms, they
 understand the level capacity and
defecitives
Suggestion
 of students and they will help to student by revision, giving some extra
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 or
evev
used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected
even
 suggesting a private tutor. In conclusion, in education process teachers p
la
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a
y an significant
role
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 and
it will be cont
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will be continued
inue
in fu
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the future
ture because no mach
ine
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
habe ability to understand humans and it can not replacement
of teachers
Suggestion
the teachers' role
teachers' role
teachers' roles
teacher's role
role
Use synonyms
in class
Suggestion
the classroom
room
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