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Social networking sites such as Facebook and Twitter are observed to have more negative effects than positive being more useful for the criminals than others. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.’

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Social media has been one of the most amazing inventions of
this
 century. Some people think that it has more disadvantages than advantages. Especially, as it is more useful to criminals. I partially agree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay, I am going to give my reason about
this
. Social media has been a boon in many ways. Networking sites like Facebook and Twitter have transformed the way we interact.
Also
, share and communicate.
For example
, I connected with my childhood friends who are all over the world. That too after 30 years and we had a school reunion. We
also
 connect with our family and are able to keep in touch with them constantly. And
also
 be a part of family function like weddings etc. Social media has helped in alleviating communication gap. Especially, between people in remote areas. They have provided a rapid and effective way of interaction between them. It has
also
 helped in fighting injustice and taking up social causes.
However
, networking sites have their drawbacks
also
. The number of users has become disjointed and self centred. Because they are spending more time in front of their laptops, mobiles, and etc.,
as a result
, they are lacking in social skills. Since we are sharing a lot of our personal information, photographs etc.
Although
, there is a risk of it being misused by criminals. There are people who are trolling others. Which at times can have detrimental effects. There are people with fake accounts enticing young girls and boys. It leads to causing fraud relationships and mental trauma. In conclusion, social media has positively revolutionized the way we communicate, especially in the past few decades.
However
, while using it, we need to be privacy and security conscious.
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