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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#exploration #development #alternatives #fuels #priority
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With the advent of population and industrialization, the consumption of fossil fuels has increased exponentially in the
last
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 few decades. Many believe including myself that it is crucial that world should look for more alternatives before these
energy
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 reservoirs get over. In
this
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 essay I will elaborate on two reasons why research and development of the green
energy
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 sources ought to be the top priority for the nations. One of the predominant reasons to explore renewable source of energies is that the fossil fuels are non-renewable. Even though currently we have abundant resources which could
last
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 for another 100 years, we need to plan or look for replacement to avoid any impact after it gets completely depleted. Nowadays, almost all the industries and human beings are highly relying on these resources for their day to day activities like
fueling
the experiencing of affective and emotional states
feeling
filling
 their
vehciles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
vessels
, or lighting their houses and businesses. If we completely ran out of these non-renewable resources of
energy
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 without any alternatives, it would impact the world drastically.
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, it is vital for the government to fund and encourage the
intitatives
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 which individuals and organisations are taking to discover other green
energy
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 resources.
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, the utilisation of these fossil fuels is deteriorating for the climate. Research
have shown
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has shown
 that the burning of these fuels
increase
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increases
 the carbon footprint which is depleting the ozone layer causing other harmful diseases like cancer.
Furthermore
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, the impact of mining and processing these
energy
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 resources are depleting the air and waterways. The BP spill that happened in
mediterreanean
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Mediterreanean
 sea a decade back is still
effecting
arousing affect
affecting
 the marine life in that region.
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, it is important for the countries
to look
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look
 for better and greener alternatives that could maintain a healthy ecosystem and have
least impact
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less impact
 on the climate. To conclude, in order to balance the demand as well as to maintain a healthy environment, it is very important for the people living on
this
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 planet to take
intiative
readiness to embark on bold new ventures
initiative
initiatives
 and explore
more safe
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safer
 and greener alternatives that could replace the fossil fuels.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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