Some people who have been in prison become good citizen later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many criminals nowadays become
good citizen
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good citizens
a good citizen
after being released from prison. Many educators think they are the people most suitable to talk to children about the dangers of committing crimes. Personally, I agree with
this
idea. It is a fact that the way children are educated about the consequences of crime committing is boring. The usual approach which is having teachers citing laws is very theoretical. Having police officers sharing their crime fighting experience only show one side of the story. Which is why having ex-convicts sharing their own stories and how they turned to be good citizens would definitely be an eye-opening experience for children.
Furthermore
,
this
approach compliments well with the trial- and –error teaching method which is an efficient learning approach for most children. Specially, the student is
enable
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enabled
to see someone who did a wrong
thing but
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thing, but
then
realized their
wrong-doings
departure from what is ethically acceptable
wrongdoings
wrongdoing
and strive to become better. It is understandable why there are concerns about having ex-cons being close
with
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to
the children.
However
, these concerns should not be concerned at all.
First
of all, the rehabilitation of prisoners is an extremely difficult but efficient process.
Therefore
, the ex-cons are very vastly likely to become law abiding citizens. They will not harm the children before, during or after talking to them.
Secondly
, the meeting will always be supervised strictly by teachers and security guards. In conclusion,
although
many would think having ex-criminals sharing experiences
to
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of
with
children can be harmful, I think that
this
is a creative way to educate children on the dangers of breaking the law.
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