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today more and more teenagers make important decisions, such as study field and career choices, themselves. What problems does it cause? How to solve them

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Nowadays, the young prefer to take their own decision on choosing
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job
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a job
 and subject.
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, some problems could arise. Making a decision on their own can cause unhappiness in the workplace in
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future
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the future
. Predominantly, students are not aware of the upcoming challenges
,
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,
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 as hard working on the field
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 working with difficult clients. Their choice could
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 deprive them from the
future
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job
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 opportunities, in the sense that teenagers are not well informed about the higher status professions. So that they can earn a low wage for their bad choice of career. The most practical solution is holding seminars on
future
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 career opportunities.
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, these seminars will inform teenagers about the
future
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 jobs. Parents
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 can help their children on making
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 decision.
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 they cannot intervene in the choices of their kids, parents can assist them by giving advices about
job
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 opportunities.
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, experts in the different fields can meet with teenagers to inform them about the possible challenges
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of
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 the field and how to avoid them.
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, the young will be prepared for difficult tasks which can affect their motivation. In conclusion, difficult work environment, having a low wage
job
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 can be the results of choosing career alone, but they can be solved by informing the teenagers on professions.
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