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It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they use to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought close together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.

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The statement has been believed by people now that, relational bonds are not as strong as it was earlier. So what exactly is the reason behind that,
moreover what
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moreover, what
 could be done to increase the bond, so that relations can be stronger.
Firstly
, with the change in the technology has played a huge role in
this
, as most of the individuals are nowadays busy with it,
for example
, using their cell phones, busy with social media, browsing internet and other
such
 activities.
Consequently
, people don't talk much with each other,
besides
 staying at the same home. And
also
 with the modern culture lots of people started living separately and preferring nuclear family rather than joint family. Moving on to the changes, we need to arrange some get-together with each other frequently by looking for opportunities. Each family needs to have some schedule time off from the online life and spend time with each member of the house talking with each other for that span of a day.
For instance
, taking your attention from online to offline plays a huge role and people will be more relational than social in terms of online. Because the physical impact is always greater than online touch,
hence
 the bonds will be stronger because by spending time, they will get to know what exactly is happening in each others lives. So to conclude, I would like to restate that increase in internet activities plays a major role in the distancing of the families and one should know how to make balance in their lives, because offline relations are more important than online world which could be fake. And
also
 by having joint families will increase the individual and family bonds and relations.
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