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SOME EXPERTS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR CHILDREN TO BEGIN LEARNING A FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL RATHER THAN SECONDARY SCHOOL. DO THE ADVANTAGES OF THIS OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

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SOME EXPERTS SUGGEST THAT IT IS HIGH TIME FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN A FOREIGN
LANGUAGE
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 AT PRIMARY
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INSTEAD
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 OF AT SECONDARY
LEVEL
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. IN MY OPINION, LEARNING A
SECOND
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LANGUAGE
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 AT PRIMARY HAS MORE ADVANTAGES THAN DISADVANTAGES. IN GENERAL, TEACHING A SECONDARY
LANGUAGE
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 RATHER THAN MOTHER
LANGUAGE
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 AT PRIMARY CAN BE FRUITFUL IN MANY WAYS AS THEY ARE ENTHUSIASTIC TO LEARN ANYTHING AND MOST IMPORTANTLY IT WILL HELP THEM IN LONG RUN TO BECOME A GLOBAL PERSON.
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, CHILDREN ARE SO PASSIONATE AS WELL AS
QUICK LEARNER
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A QUICK LEARNER
 THAT THEY ALWAYS ASK QUESTION ABOUT WHAT THEY SEE, WHAT THEY FEEL, WHAT THEY HEAR AND
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 SOMETIMES THEY MAKE THEIR PARENTS TIRED BY ASKING ABOUT FACTS ONE AFTER ANOTHER. THEY ARE SO TALENTED AND BECAUSE OF THE FACT, THEY ACQUIRE THEIR MOTHER TONGUE IN A SHORTER TIME FRAME.
BESIDES
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, THEY LEARN PHONETICS ALONG WITH GRAMMAR IN PLAYFUL MANNER AND
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, THEY DO NOT FEEL ANY PRESSURE.
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, QUALITY OF TEACHERS AND CORRESPONDING STAFF AT PRIMARY
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 IS QUESTIONABLE AND GOVERNMENT SHOULD UNDERTAKE SOME CRUCIAL STANCE TO SOLVE THE CRISIS.
SECONDLY
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, WE ARE LIVING IN A GLOBALISED WORLD AND ALL COUNTRIES ARE CONNECTED IN
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 A WAY THAT NO ONE CAN LIVE ALONE BY IGNORING OTHER COUNTRIES AS WELL AS ITS CITIZENS. SO, EVERYONE SHOULD RESPECT OTHERS IRRESPECTIVE OF THEIR CASTE, RELIGION, AND RACES AND
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 LEARNING ANOTHER
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, AS WELL AS ITS CULTURE AT
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 TENDER
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, CAN BE CRUCIAL AS IT WILL GRADUALLY MAKE THEM AN UNIVERSAL PERSON.
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, INTENSIVE CARE SHOULD BE ADOPTED THAT IT WILL NOT MAKE ANY CHILD PHYSICALLY AND MENTALLY ILL. IN CONCLUSION, TEACHING A FOREIGN
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 AT PRIMARY LEVAL
INSTEAD
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 OF INTERMEDIATE
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 CAN ENSURE BETTER FUTURE FOR CHILDREN AND FOR US TOO YET SO MANY PRECAUTIONARY DEEDS NEED TO BE IMPLEMENTED.
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