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Living in a
country
 where everybody has to speak another
language
 expect her
/
his self mother tongue, certainly,
this
 can create serious social problems and
also
 practical problems.
This
 essay strongly agrees that living in a
country
 that you cannot speak the local
language
language
 there, of course,
this
 can cause several problems to you,
for instance
, you expose social problems,
such
Suggestion
Such
 as, you will not able to communicate with other people
to
Suggestion
with
 working or become Friend with another of
this
problem
 can make practical problems,
for example
, You cannot make a successful working on the relationship.
First
 of all,
this
 can make deep social problems,
for example
, he
/
she will not able to find an excellent friend or a person who can help her
/
him. So
this
 can make more and more problems.
Besides
,
this
 can cause
problem
Suggestion
a problem
problems
 with a job or every working that it calls Practical
problem
,
such
 as, buying and more and more work,
however
,
this
also is
Suggestion
has also been
 a serious
problem
. In conclusion, immigration to graduate or every working to a
country
 where main
language
 that
country
 is different with
language
 that person
this
 can make
problem
 to everybody whom he
/
she does not know or less find out main
language
 that
country
,
for example
, it can cause main social issues,
furthermore
, practical problems.
Finally
, In my attitude, everybody who decides to go to a foreign
country
, he
/
she can learn about that
language
 and after that he
/
she go that
country
.
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