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 where everybody has to speak another
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 expect her
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his self mother tongue, certainly,
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 can create serious social problems and
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 that you cannot speak the local
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language
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she will not able to find an excellent friend or a person who can help her
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him. So
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she does not know or less find out main
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she can learn about that
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 and after that he
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she go that
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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